Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Little Book of Days

Hey all. So, here is my attempt at mimicking a passage from Little Book of Days.

IN CLASS. A professor squawks with the effortless screech of a parrot. The girl next to me receives a baby in an electronic message. Pen clicks. The blue one is the only one that works. My face begins to enlighten and I count all the bones in my face. Two, maybe three. Ethical nihilism is beginning to look like the easiest way out of thought. The masses are we, running from the treadmills in our heads.

WALKING. The breeze settles upon the greenness of the grass, restless. Poems begin spewing from my steps, but I cannot hold them in. A man listens to music too loudly and runs off the beat. As the sky erases its being, the oxygen disappears. Gray building, gray plant, gray steam. Soon I walk within my own rhythm and the leaves appear to dance.

-Alex Fiola


  1. Alex
    I really enjoyed your mimic of Little Book of Days. It conveys the immediate stylistic elements she was going for. However, I found your rendition much more inspiring. You have a nice way of displaying the mundane with grand detail. "My face begins to enlighten and I count all the bones in my face". This is a good use of gesture, as we read in Prose.

    Jason Yelland

  2. Thank you for your commentary! I always love feedback.


  3. I also enjoyed your rendition. It was brief, but full. It was a pleasant change from that of "Little Book of Days".

  4. I feel like your "in class" piece really captures the boredom that can be felt from sitting through a irksome class. I can relate a lot to the first line, a professor's voice and method of teaching can play a crucial role in what you walk away from the class with, whether it be the feeling that you're actually getting something out of your education, or just a page filled with random doodles

  5. I was really able to picture your "walking" piece. It's easy to follow and I enjoyed reading it.

  6. I, too, enjoyed reading your rendition more so than the actual piece. Beautifully written.

  7. "A professor squaks with the effortless screech of a parrot" I love this! Yes, this response is full of quality, without the need for quantity- seeing as every line has more than one layer of description, metaphor & simile. This is great work.


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