very short and too the point but I like it. this poem says a lot contextually while actually saying practically nothing.
oh man, i love the shortness. says a lot
It is short, yet effective. There is definitely a sense of worth to this piece, because even though it is small, it holds a lot of weight. Good job, you managed to do a lot with very little.
I really like the precision in your words. Effective. I think it would be cool to play with more lines, and based on the way "body" lines up, perhaps construct a poem that creates the shape of a body, hourglass, or whatever. Even though I do think there's so much power here in your short length
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