Wednesday, March 3, 2010

The Dream Song-14 Rendition

I enjoyed this poem by Berryman but I'm not exactly sure where the hell I took it.

My life, friends, is decent. Please don’t say - “no”.

For this I know, I’m only 20, but only ordinary

unlike those who touch something more

please don’t tell me - “I’ll figure it out”

that - “it takes time”

and that - “some of the greats had no real ‘plan’”

Plans make me feel productive. But I’m not

I just whine to those who are forced to read

You hate this, I hate this,

He, she, it, hates this

and by this I mean my poem

But I do like my socks

and some of my friends, who seem not to mind me

walking in the sun, rare, but not unheard of, keeps me better than bad,

than okay. I like what I have. And right now

it’s paper and ink and a silly grin.


  1. I don't hate this, I think you did a good job of capturing the style of Dream Song 14. I like the playfulness of your poem, if that makes sense, especially the line "But I do like my socks", as well as the ending line

  2. I really like what you did. It seems lighthearted while also having a few dark moments. The last stanza is my favorite, too.

  3. this is so cute. i really like the last stanza. I like how your voice really comes through. It's distinct and while you adapted Berryman's form, your personality comes through in this.


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